Author: Josiah

Autobiography

June 19, 2015 / / 0 Comments

There I was, silently and gracefully coming out of my mum. Everyone staring at me saying ‘aw so cute and little let me hold him’. (I remember my mum giving me to my great aunt, she held me above her head like in lion king. So embarrassing) As I was being held by my aunt, I excreted on her leaving her in distraught. I was given back to my mum. Then the doctor cleaned me off, then  a few days later I was gone.

We leave the house. Its 8:15 in the morning and we are walking down acre-lane. We catch the bus. ‘good morning driver, how are you today?’ I ask. ‘Im fine thank you.’

A few minutes later me and my mother get off of the bus and walk down to Sudbourne road.( My first day at school and Im so excited!!!!!!!) As we approach the school gates I see lots of people much bigger than me and I think ‘oh my gosh their so big’We walk in and we see my new headmaster and teacher.My mum stops to talk to them. ‘ mum come lets go, I want meet some new friends.’ I went to my new classroom and saw some new people. Straight away, I have made a friend. ‘Hi tyrique how are you, do you wonna be friends?’

 

There we were, standing in our positions waiting for the whistle to go. The pressure so intense our hearts dropped after every breath. All that’s on our minds ‘we have to win come on team, we can do this’. I shout ‘come on evolution we can do this’.

The whistle blows, we run in putting pressure on them strait away. They loose possesion. We take advantage of this and drive forwards passing the ball across the pitch, doing skills, long balls and short.we get into the final quarter of the pitch, our center midfielder takes a shot… Aaaww it’s hits the crossbar and bounces back, I header it and it’s a goal…

Facilities 2

May 5, 2015 / / 4 Comments

                                                                         

                                                                          Facilities

 

weve got issues

Dear Mr Dastagir

The point that I would like to make is about the sports facilities in our school. Better sports facilities need to be available because the ones that we have are not good enough (especially because we are in a sports school). My friends and I have all been affected by these issues, that’s why I am writing to you.

In addition, the old year seven playground is inadequate due to it being a car park. This is unacceptable. One of the most popular sports in any school is football and we do not get the chance to enjoy it.  If you would like some respect for your school, then you should lay down some rules. If we do not abide by these rules then we should not have our playground and should lose it to the year elevens. Everybody deserves a second chance and that includes us.

Furthermore, in the playground the older year groups (year nines)have a tendency to push in the line for games like nine square, this results in us year sevens not being able to play and feeling insecure. I have friends that have been victims of this problem and so have I. This is nothing to be proud of as a school because if Ofsted were to find out about this then the schools reputation/standards will be lowered severely.

The main reason people get injured is because the year nines take advantage of all year sevens that look vulnerable by pushing them and barging them out of the way and on to the floor. Recently, my friend anonymous was a victim of this, he was pushed over by a year nine and had a serious migraine. Year eights are used to this because they had it last year and have adapted to it.lHow would you feel to be the victim of one of these issues? I know that you as an adult feel as though we should not worry about it and grow up but some people feel the total opposite to you.

Moreover, we could raise money to buy our own pitch/es. We Could do a fund raiser by setting up football tournament or selling cakes or something (but not too expensive like the last one). You could even set up a summer fair for each year. These approaches will earn you some money to put towards our facilities.

What I think you should do ,as a year seven my self, is at the end of this academic year, you should give the present year nines (new year tens) their own playground and every other year group can share. This will secure our safety and make sure that we do not end up injured.

This is what I think about these issues but what do you think.

Its all down to you sir, lose your students safety and trust, or fix our problems and save your school.

Thank you for reading my letter.

I hope you take this into consideration.

Yours Sincerely

Josiah Mitchell 7W1P

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Final Dystopian Story

December 6, 2012 / / 0 Comments

There are a number of examples of very strong personal and creative expression in this piece, Sam.

I’m going to focus (by changing their colour to red) on the phrases and sentences that I feel may need a little more work. Often they are correct, but unclear or even simply clumsy. If you don’t know what I think is wrong, or don’t agree, feel free to discuss it in a comment on this page.

It was a dark and dingy day and it was pouring with rain. Everybody stayed in their homes and looked solemnly outside of the window and did not set a foot out of the front door. Beyond the Houses of Parliament, a gigantic mansion stood firm containing a master mind observing his city.

The sudden flush of sorrow lingered in the city streets until one man stood up to protest against the leaders.”Let us not sit in our homes pulling faces and watching the television. Our city was a comforting place and very peaceful, but do not let the power of our city’s pain and tribulation come upon us but let our freedom rise from the dead.”

He wondered down the middle of the road, knocking at each door and was always met by a man or a woman but this confrontation troubled his faith in the people of this city. In front of him stood the vicious guards of this city, he gave up with passion because of what he had done.  The air which was clear smelt of obnoxious food. He felt the loss of his city’s freedom struggling to enter,he heard the monstrous sound of his heart stampeding enormously,the city will gradually die with excruciating pain unless he could convince the guards to join him in a force to make our city a better place for everyone.“Lets say that you are me and your city has been totally demolished by an evil genius and many of his companions with lasers and mutant powers,what would you do? Other people are getting terrorised  by aliens and your just going to standing caging people in prison cells.Well, that is what I’m trying to do without you guards putting a burden on my back so are you in or are you not?

How is the mood set in chapter 1 of Haroun?

March 6, 2015 / / 1 Comment

 

In the story of Haroun, the mood is set as a sad one.This is because it says in the first sentence ‘, a sad city, a city so ruinously sad that it had forgotten its name. ‘ meaning the city is not a great place to live in. In addition to this it also states, ‘in which sadness was actually manufactured’ the author is using personification to give the reader/s more detail, humour and a better explanation of what is happening in the first paragraph. It also says soon after that, ‘(maybe the sadness of the city finally crept in through their windows)’, this is also an example of personification because it says crept in through their windows and.

Haroun and his family had been the only happy family in the city if not country.This was because of him and his family being very happy because his dad is a very happy story teller and a his mum is a very happy singer which keeps their family happy.This is why haroun and his family are so happy (compared to everyone else) in the city of Alifbay.                                                         On the other hand, later on his mum leaves…   What will happen next?????…….

Salman Rushdie uses a type of fairy- tale beginning to start us off for the upcoming events.’there was once’ is what he starts us off with. Usually in a fairy tale you start it with ‘once upon a time’ or ‘there was once’ or even ‘in a land far far away’ this is because when one person starts something cool you tend to copy it to make yours even better.This is why the author ‘Salman Rushdie’ uses ‘ there was once ‘… As a beginning.

In addition to my first paragraph, it states that Rashid has two different names one being the ‘ocean of notions’ and the other being ‘the shah of blah’.you probably would have thought that he would have no rivals before you complete the first few pages. But this is only because of his explanation.